In this post, I will peer review Malik Bullock's rough cut. I focused on the raw content of his first main body, which can be found here.
I think Malik is off to a good start. However, if this is one of his main body sections, he should consider adding more content. He has a good topic sentence but not much to support it.
Also, I suggest that Malik adds more about the background of the issue and the different arguments behind it.
As far as citations go, Malik provided the name of the source that he might want to incorporate. If he does include it in his video essay. He should make sure to introduce the author of the source and its credibility.
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