(P.S. this is very republican. I'm not even a republican LOL I just thought it would be easy to support this argument. )
Opening Section:
“Imagine this: Born into a middle class family, where your
parents worked hard their whole lives, and made responsible choices regarding
how they spent, and saved, their money. They “played by the rules”, doing what
was right and just, they paid taxes on time, and always felt the need to have
good auto, home, life and health insurance. As health insurance cost continued
to rise, it became a larger and larger part of our family’s budget.
Hi, my name is Sofia Haserot and I will be discussing the
public controversy over ObamaCare. The main issue that the United States deals
with is the fact that health insurance is becoming far too expensive for the
majority of the society to afford. There are many things that people in this
country disagree on, but everyone appears to agree that health care costs were
becoming so high that more and more families were unable to pay for it.
ObamaCare, also referred to as Medicaid, was an attempt to change the health care system in America, with the
intent of lowering costs and providing coverage for those who did not have
health care.
But the reality is that after all the politics and time
spent on revamping the health system, most people have seen their health care
costs increase dramatically. So, yes, Obama Care was born, but rather than
lowering costs, it has done the opposite. It has essentially accomplished the
following…it gave something very expensive, to a group of people that either
could not afford it, or didn’t want to pay for it, commonly know as the
uninsured. Billed as something that would not cost the country nothing, but
providing expensive insurance to 30 million people at no charge ended up
costing someone…this is where my family comes back into the health care
equation. Under Obamacare, the poor get insurance for free, and the rest pick
up the bill. The rich are rich, so they aren’t that affected by the increase in
costs, but the middle class has been hit hard. Not qualifying for subsidies,
and costs rising yearly, this new system is hurting the hard working middle class.
Simply because of the fact that you’ve been responsible your whole life, the
government decides you are a perfect candidate to pay extra for those who
either haven’t been so responsible or just haven’t been able to fortunate
enough to get ahead in life. This
is exactly what happened to my father, and it hit our family hard.
In order to understand the situation and its entirety, each
stakeholder must be introduced.
Obviously Obama is the biggest stakeholder, considering the
fact that ObamaCare was his doing.
He states, “In the United States of America, health care is
not a privilege for the fortunate few, it is a right. And I knew that if we
didn’t do something about our unfair and inefficient health care system, it
would keep driving up our deficits, it would keep burdening our businesses, it
would keep hurting our families, and it would keep holding back economic
growth.”
Additionally, we have the key player fueling the “defund
ObamaCare” movement, Jim DeMint. This man has done everything in his power to
thwart the president’s health care law. He is an American politician and a
member of the Republican party. He is also the president of the Heritage
Foundation, a conservative thinktank.
Body Section 3:
Additionally, some
people, like men in good health with no preexisting conditions, who were
not responsible for anyone but themselves, and who remained healthy, were
benefiting from being in a low risk group. They may have had cheap limited
coverage before the premium hikes took place in 2014.
Video: "The Good The Bad & The Ugly Side of ObamaCare (time @ 2:00).
Conclusion:
It is clear that ObamaCare has good intentions, however, I am not sure how good this solution is for America's increased health care costs. Yes, ObamaCare retains a free market and allows our 3 trillion dollar healthcare industry to thrive in some ways. However, Americans still have higher healthcare costs than other countries, which have more universal healthcare systems. Hopefully, one day it will be possible to take the positives from ObamaCare and merge them with a more ideal and fair healthcare system in the future. Health truly is the most important thing and number one priority for a person, however, that person's healthcare should not be made another's responsibility.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1i0mX4mukCOxipgJmIalAiKqlzCuiM3NMYQaM5KN7QNU/edit?usp=sharing
ReplyDeleteHi Sofia! I chose your video essay to peer review and I will be focusing on content! I like what you have here so far, especially, if I can point one thing out, I like how you chose a topic and a side you knew would be good for arguing! So, I see you have a nice flow of organization with your intro being just that, into a paragraph where you are introducing your stakeholders, and then a paragraph of benefits, and then (I'm a little unclear on what you're trying to portay in your third paragraph), and then your conclusion.
ReplyDeleteI would say you could almost combine your intro and first body paragraph into one since the stakeholders don't really play a part in the debate itself, besides being on sides.
I would also say you might want to include some negative things along with the benefits and then you could argue your side from a more qualified perspective.
I got a little lost with what you're trying to say in the third paragraph, so maybe you could have a topic sentence outlining its purpose.
Other than that, I thought your script looks pretty good, nice and concise!