Tryptofish, "Thousand Words." 15 June 2011. Creative Commons. |
I do think that my sentence transitions are slightly repetitive. For example, I start each paragraph with the same topic sentence, introducing the stakeholders. My intentions were to immediately inform the reader who I would be focusing on next; however, now that I am reading my essay over again, I think I can be more creative.
If I am being honest, my vocabulary could definitely use some work. It is very simple and clear, however I find that my word choice is not as insightful and vivid as I hoped. I plan to enhance my vocabulary in my final draft.
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